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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Nuclear technology has been a boon as well
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bane to
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human society. In my opinion, It has been more harmful than beneficial. I would argue that the
countries
 with nuclear
power
 exercise dominance in terms of
negotiatons
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negotiations
with non-nuclear
countries
. They use nuclear
weapon
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weapons
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 as a political tool to exercise unfair advantage and control over
the
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other
countries
.
This
situation
 is bound to reach a threshold when tension between the nuclear and non-nuclear
countries
 will boil over and lead to very undesired situations.
Also
, imagine a
situation
 where an unfairly treated non-nuclear country develops its own nuclear weapon and tries to retaliate for all the suppression it went through.
Also
, every year there are
few
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 more nations with
the
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nuclear
weapon
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weapons
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, that
situation
 is not far away
where
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when
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 most
of
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countries
 will have their own nuclear
weapons
 and we are back to
square
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 where there
were
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 no nations with nuclear
power
. So if the argument that nuclear
weapons
 maintain peace were to be true there
will
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 be a
situation
 where every nation
will
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would
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 have nuclear
weapons
 and
effect
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the effect
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 of possessing nuclear
weapons
will
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 be neutralised and peace
will
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would
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 be over. Though
,
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 I agree with the fact that nuclear technology provides us with cheap and clean energy, I would
Argue
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 that the side effects of casualties in nuclear plants have been fatal and irreversible.
For example
,
explosion
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the explosion
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 In
Chernobyl
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the Chernobyl
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power
plant
 resulted in
death
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the death
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 of
plethora
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a plethora
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 of people,
animal
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animals
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 and plants.
Also
, it affected the whole
eco system
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ecosystem
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surrounding the neighbourhood. On top of that,
city
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the city
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 of
Chernobyl
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Chornobyl
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 is still unliveable and it will be unliveable
to
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a
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 foreseeable future. I would
also
 like to back my claim
by
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with
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 another example of a
power
plant
 in Japan’s coastal area which was marred by
earthquake
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earthquakes
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 and
Tsunami
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tsunamis
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. Though the
plant
 has been abandoned, we still have reactive water trapped in
a
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plant
 which needs to be cured before it
could
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can
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 be released
in
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into
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sea
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the sea
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. My point here is that we haven’t been able to develop techniques yet to handle the fatalities involved with nuclear technology and we are not ready yet to fully utilise it without causing any substantial harm to our ecosystem.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Deterrence
  • Mutually assured destruction
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Cost-effective
  • Radiation therapy
  • Proliferation
  • Rogue states
  • Radioactive waste disposal
  • Catastrophic accidents
  • Climate change
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