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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. if there are not taught, many are at risk of dying out.

#english #school #languages #risk
In current days, English is one of the language
that is
 often considered essential to learn and there is a considerable decline in the interest to learn the local languages. In fact, is has reached an alarming situation as various problems are associated with
this
 issue. The following paragraphs would highlight various aspects of
this
 menace. There are myriad reasons which trigger the issue and even more male it worse.
First
 and foremost, English is the official language in more than 50 countries, most of which one well-developed nations. English speaking skills will come in handy in a situation when you are trying to migrate abroad.
Furthermore
, the English speaking countries
such
 as the US, the UK, Canada and Australia are considered to be the best destinations for higher education.
In addition
, job opportunities for an individual with better English skills are numerous. To exemplify, in many countries, the employers are only interested in those candidates who can have a good conversation with their client and express opinion fluently. Another key opinion is the native speech should be taught so as to preserve them for
next
 generations. There are many scriptures and books written in local languages that are full of knowledge and wisdom.
For example
, in my country, history of the ancient Mongolian kings was
first
 found in Mongolian traditional script name as 'Uigarjin
bichig
'. It is very important for future generations to read and write the Mongolian national writing by themselves. Undoubtedly, every lock has the key.
Similarly
, some solutions should be implemented. Including these languages in the school curriculum is one of the ways to preserve them.
Moreover
, governments should provide incentives
such
 as a scholarship to students with local accent skills. To conclude, I would like to state that government and individual both should put their best foot forward together in order to curb the issue.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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