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The graph provides information about the
percentage
 of the population in the United Kingdom who ate fruits and vegetables. Overall, the experiment made the analysis of the role population, women, men and even children, during a period of seven years, between 2001 and 2008. The
percentage
 variation between the people evaluated are quite similar. The bar chart shows that they follow the same flow with an
alternance
the use of uttered sounds for auditory communication
utterance
 of
moderately
Suggestion
moderate
 changes over the years. For some reason not explained in the data provided, the
percentage
 of the women who ate at least five portions of fruits in 2006 was around 35 percent,
that is
 significantly different from the 20 percent of women who used to eat fruits and vegetables in 2001.
On the other hand
, it is noticeable that men are less healthy than the women's population. While there has always been an increase in the
percentage
 of women who eat the food provided by the environment, men were stocked in 10 percent during the
first
 three years since the research started, as well as the children.

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