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Today, the majority of people are aware of the threaten of global warming and a lot of animals are
suffer
Suggestion
suffering
 from it. Scientists are researching the harmful effects of global warming in order to decrease its adverse effects. There are two possible detrimental effects of global warming on creatures' health and the balance of nature. One possible adverse effect of global warming is that it causes the extinction of animals. Due to the fact that
glaciers
Suggestion
the glaciers
 will melt during to the global warming,
this
 situation brings about
climate
 changes. That's why, animals' lives are threatened by
climate
 changes.
Moreover
, the food change may corrupt because of some creatures cannot survive. Another possible negative effect of global warming is that it leads to the corruption of nature's balance. Green house gases which are
emmited
expel (gases or odors)
emitted
omitted
 from
atmosphere
Suggestion
the atmosphere
 may cause
climate
 changes and glaciers may melt on the world.
Therefore
, a lot of creatures, including human,
may be suffer
Suggestion
may suffer
 from the extinction due to the corruption of nature. To conclude, global warming has two significant adverse effects. Global warming may threat animals' lives.
Moreover
, it brings about
climate
 changes and
this
 situation is dangerous for all creatures.
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