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The amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in schools in order to tackle the problem of overweight children? Do you think this is the best way to deal with the problem? What other solution can you suggest?

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At present, all people are getting aware about their health and they
also
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 try to keep themselves fit. Meanwhile, some individuals argue that schools and colleges must be increased the proportion of time, which they spend on
game
Suggestion
the game
games
 as well as exercise in order to tackle the obesity of children
,
Accept space
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which causes a lot. I do think that these are the two best ways that can handle the problem of
overwight
usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it
overweight
 children.
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, There are many other ways to overcome on it. My inclination and other solutions are discussed
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.
To begin
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 with, students have to spend most of their time at school,
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 some of are having
viewpoint
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a viewpoint
 that school needs
to play
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play
major role
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a major role
 in physical activities. In
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morden
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
 world, many of schools concentrate only academic studies rather than physical activities.
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 is
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 of society regards success with academic studies not in physical fitness.
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