The amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in schools in order to tackle the problem of overweight children? Do you think this is the best way to deal with the problem? What other solution can you suggest?

At present, all people are getting aware about their health and they
also
try to keep themselves fit. Meanwhile, some individuals argue that schools and colleges must be increased the proportion of time, which they spend on
game
Suggestion
the game
games
as well as exercise in order to tackle the obesity of children
,
Accept space
,
which causes a lot. I do think that these are the two best ways that can handle the problem of
overwight
usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it
overweight
children.
Also
, There are many other ways to overcome on it. My inclination and other solutions are discussed
further
.
To begin
with, students have to spend most of their time at school,
therefore
some of are having
viewpoint
Suggestion
a viewpoint
that school needs
to play
Suggestion
play
major role
Suggestion
a major role
in physical activities. In
this
morden
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
world, many of schools concentrate only academic studies rather than physical activities.
This
is
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
of society regards success with academic studies not in physical fitness.
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