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Some people think that government funding should not be used for supporting art and culture,while others think that supporting cultural activities may be beneficial for the population and the culture.Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Nowadays, everyone is forgetting the values and traditions that are followed for centuries. These customs add huge value to the particular place by describing the prominence of the particular arts.
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, the world is migrating with a tremendous speed, we should not forget the customs that are followed for a long time. We have been seeing that there is an increase in people who are visiting cities to know about traditions that are followed. Supporting the arts and culture in turn, creates the revenue by attracting the foreigners from various parts of the world. There are
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 minor disadvantages; some people argue that there are many areas that government need to focus on improving.
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, we can see that in some places people are facing the problems like not having enough drinking water and
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 not having good transport system. People think that government should invest on these basic things rather than supporting the other areas. But to provide support, there needs to be a huge amount of revenue that needs to be generated in the
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 place. After considering all the pros and cons, it was concluded that the advantages of providing the support of art and culture far outweigh the disadvantages. In my view, government needs to support the arts and traditions that have been followed since long time to attract the visitors and to generate the revenue for the country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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