Some people think that government funding should not be used for supporting art and culture, while others think that supporting cultural activities may be beneficial for the population and the culture. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Government providing funds to the art and culture has always been debatable.
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people
argue that the money can be used to reduce unemployment, others believe that it creates
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more revenue
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both the state and
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.
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both sides of
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in detail and provide evidence
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why funding
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art and culture is necessary. On one hand , some
people
believe that the funds from the ministry can be used
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the lack of employment.
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is because nowadays many
people
are facing difficulties in finding a job even though they have the sufficient skills required to acquire a job.
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, we can see every year there are lots of students who have
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from
colleges
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difficulties
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a job.
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others believe that funding the craft and culture in turn generates
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revenue by encouraging
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tourists from all over the world.
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is because we can see that
people
from different parts would like to know the customs and traditions by travelling to various parts.
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people
travelling to India to
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the
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different
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forms like dance and painting.
As a result
the revenue for the government increases , which can be used for various other things. After considering all the pros and cons, it was concluded that the advantages of providing the support of craft and civilization outweigh the disadvantages. In my view,
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needs to support the arts and traditions that have been followed
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long
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time to attract
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visitors and
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generate
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wealth for the country
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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