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Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements.

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Some people believe that students with outstanding
achievement
 should be rewarded, while others are in favour of giving rewards to students who demonstrate progress in learning so as to encourage them
.
Accept space
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 My view is that we both of these student groups should be praised. On the one hand, we should recognize the
achievement
 of gifted students for a number of reasons.
First
, to accomplish good academic performance, even brilliant students might have to invest a lot of time and effort in studying, so a reward will give an acknowledgement of the effort they have made. Not being praised for their exceptional performance might
demotivate
 high achievers and slowly but surely they might
lose r
Suggestion
lose
loser
 interest in their studies.
Second
, students who achieve excellent academic outcomes can set
good example
Suggestion
a good example
 for other students to follow, and rewards for outstanding
achievement
 may promote learning among all students.
On the other hand
, reward should
also
 be given to low achievers who demonstrate signs of progress because of the effort they have put into their work. . Immediate encouragement can make students feel more determined to work harder to keep pace with their fellow students.
Furthermore
, students lacking very high
achievement
 are more likely to feel
demotivated
 just because of their lower levels of performance.
Consequently
, when their efforts are valued they may gradually become more confident and inspired to develop their capacity to work towards achieving better results.
This
 will have a positive long - term impact on the learning process of weaker students and bring benefits to their learning process. In conclusion, in my opinion, encouragement always raises motivation, and,
students whether
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students, whether
 with
low or high level
Suggestion
a low or high level
 of competence, should be awarded for their improvement as well as for excellent academic results.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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