Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements.

Some people believe that students with outstanding
achievement
should be rewarded, while others are in favour of giving rewards to students who demonstrate progress in learning so as to encourage them
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My view is that we both of these student groups should be praised. On the one hand, we should recognize the
achievement
of gifted students for a number of reasons.
First
, to accomplish good academic performance, even brilliant students might have to invest a lot of time and effort in studying, so a reward will give an acknowledgement of the effort they have made. Not being praised for their exceptional performance might
demotivate
high achievers and slowly but surely they might
lose r
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lose
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interest in their studies.
Second
, students who achieve excellent academic outcomes can set
good example
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a good example
for other students to follow, and rewards for outstanding
achievement
may promote learning among all students.
On the other hand
, reward should
also
be given to low achievers who demonstrate signs of progress because of the effort they have put into their work. . Immediate encouragement can make students feel more determined to work harder to keep pace with their fellow students.
Furthermore
, students lacking very high
achievement
are more likely to feel
demotivated
just because of their lower levels of performance.
Consequently
, when their efforts are valued they may gradually become more confident and inspired to develop their capacity to work towards achieving better results.
This
will have a positive long - term impact on the learning process of weaker students and bring benefits to their learning process. In conclusion, in my opinion, encouragement always raises motivation, and,
students whether
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students, whether
with
low or high level
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a low or high level
of competence, should be awarded for their improvement as well as for excellent academic results.
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