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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encourage. others belive that children who are thought to co-operate rather than compite ) become more usefull adults. Discuss both there views give your opinion. give reason for answers and include any relevent examples from you own knowledge or experiance.

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NOWADAYS
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PEOPLE TEND TO CREATE A COMPETATIVE ATMOSPHERE IN EVERY ASPECTS OF LIFE.IT
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 DEPENDS ON THE UPBRINGING. NOW THE POINT IS IT REALLY
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HELPFUL
 FOR THE FUTURE OF THE CHILDREN?
FIRSTLY
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CREATING COMPITATION AMONG CHILDREN ENCOURAGES THEM AND HELP THEM TO GET GOOD RESULTS TO STAND AT THE TOP.BY CREATING A COMPETATIVE ATMOSPHERE FOR CHILDREN IN A CLASSROOM IS HEALTHY.IT MAY HELP THEM TO MAXIMIZE THEIR POTENTIAL.AT THE SAME TIME IT MAY BUILD HATEDNESS AMONG THEM.
ALTHOUGH
 COMPETATION IS MUST IN FEW ACTIVITIES LIKE SPORTS
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IT IS MUST.ACCORDING TO THE SURVEY OF 2019
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THE NUMBER OF STUDENTS TEND TO STUDY BECAUSE OF THE COMPETATIVENESS RATHER THAN HAVING THE URGE TOWARDS.
NEVERTHELESS
 THEY END UP BEING STRESS.
HOWEVER
 CREATING THE CO-OPERATITION AMONG CHILDREN MAY HELP THEM TO RELY ON EACHOTHER.THE CHILDREN WHO KNOW TO CO-OPERATE AMONG THEMSELVES HAS HIGH SUCCESS RATE IN ACHIEVING THEIR GOAL. THEY CAN DO TEAMWORK MORE EFFICIENTLY THAN THE CHILDREN WHO ARE EXPOSED TO COMPETATION.MISUNDERSTANDING CAN BE AVOIDED IN
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 YIELDS GOOD RESULTS IN THE MEANS OF SOCIETY TOO. ALL IN ALL COMPITATIVE MEANS IS IMPORTANT TO REQUIRED TO ENHANCE KNOWLEDGE BUT ICOMMUNITY LIFE REQUIRE CO-OPERATION.IT WOULD BE BETTER IF PEOPLE LEARN TO BALANCE BOTH THE THINGS.
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