Many museums charge people for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museum outweigh the disadvantages?

On the one hand, there are myriad of
obvious drawbacks
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the obvious drawbacks
of charging for admission. Basically, the entrance fee in
museums possibly reduce
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museums, possibly reduces
museums possibly reduces
a large number of visitors because most of people prefer to come to places and spend their free time that can be entered without any money, especially students and locals who should understand fully about local history and culture. Apart from
this
, every citizen has the right to approach which is culturally and historically important to them.
Hence
, the introduction of the admission fee violates their right to comprehend knowledge and get information.
Additionally
, charging admission reduces the chance for low-income inhabitants and deprived artists who want to enjoy famous masterpieces and recall historical period.
For instance
,
Ho Chi Minh museum
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the Ho Chi Minh museum
is an interesting one in Hanoi equipped captivating statues, sculptures and ancient specimens during Ho Chi Minh’s life, but it can attract just few Vietnamese people because of the high-ticket price.
Moreover
, most of citizens have few opportunities to access vitally significant places to learn history, science, art, and many other essential subjects.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • educational programs
  • accessibility
  • low-income families
  • public engagement
  • admission fee
  • visitor experience
  • overcrowding
  • resources
  • inclusivity
  • economic downturns
  • financial independence
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