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Some people believe that technology has made man more sociable.To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

#people #technology #man
These days
technology
 is understood by many people as one of the many reasons on why man has become more sociable to the
wold
everything that exists anywhere
world
wild
.While it is
undisputable
not open to question; obviously true
indisputable
 that through
technology
 it has made it easier for people to communicate all over the
world
;
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;
Technology
 has
also
 promoted isolation
to
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of
 some of its users to an extent.Based on the former statement
,
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,
I would like to agree that by large the improved socialization of people has been brought about by the facets and multitude of
technology
.
Technology
 is
such
 a genuine and effective manipulator of man's life.
Technology
 has the ability to prompt lives.Socialization for one is a good example and how
technology
 has
portalised
 individuals and groups in reaching and be
coactive
tending to become more severe or wider in scope
active
 than they were in the past.
That
is through
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is, through
 the various and easy to use
communicative
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communication
communications
 tools like
cellphones
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cell phones
 and computers
,
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,
and
also
 the
lenieny
a fabric woven with fibers from the flax plant
linen
 mobility that
move
Suggestion
moves
 people in just a few seconds.With appreciation of
technology
,
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,
we can exchange speeches and
cooridinate
bring order and organization to
coordinate
co-ordinate
coordinated
 with
peole
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 in the swiftest time
,
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,
moreover
,
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,
is convincing.We can
limitlessly
 share information and ideas
,
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,
and correspond efficiently.Numerous
correspondence
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correspondence, such
such
 as going to the shopping mall
,
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,
watching films
,
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,
travelling
,
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,
online teaching and doing international businesses.
On the other hand
,
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,
there is always
darker side
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a darker side
 in everything as nothing in
this
world
 would ever go so perfect.
Technology
 without the proper knowledge of its usage can lead to dilemma to a few people.The fact that people's characters are so different from each other is one possible hardship.Some
peole
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 would have a hard time adapting to the
fastness
unusual largeness in size or extent or number
vastness
 of
technology
.Additional to
adaptation
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adapt
woulb
past tense of "will"
would
 be insecurity of using the
advanved
farther along in physical or mental development
advanced
communcative
of or relating to communication
communicative
 tools.
Finally
,
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,
I would rather say that there
are certain group of
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are a certain group of
peole
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 who have little influence
ot
the products of human creativity; works of art collectively
art
at
techology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
 like
the remotest
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the remote
 location in the
world
 and conservative people-the old
peole
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 would have a challenge to correspond with the
world
 via
technology
.
On
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In
 the nutshell
,
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,
it is still agreeable that socialization has improved its level due to
technology
.
However
,
technology
 needs to be
omniscient all
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omniscient, all
 over the
world
 to achieve socialization all throughout the
world
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social interaction
  • connect
  • communicate
  • video conferencing
  • stay in touch
  • online communities
  • forums
  • like-minded individuals
  • global communication
  • collaboration
  • access to information
  • knowledge
  • bridge the gap
  • social isolation
  • detachment
  • face-to-face communication
  • genuine human connection
  • maintain
  • real-life interactions
  • balance
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