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The table below gives information about the production of cocoa beans in six regions between 1992 and 1998.

The table below gives information about the production of cocoa beans in six regions between 1992 and 1998.
The given tabular chart illustrates
the
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information about
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cocao
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cocoa
cacao
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beans
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bean
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 manufacturing in six areas from 1992 and 1998 and measures the quantity in
tons
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
production
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 of
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cocao
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cocoa
cacao
beans
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 inclined in all parts except England and
Africa
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. It can be seen that cultivation of
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cocao
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cocoa
cacao
beans
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 was less in North and
central
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America
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 than
other
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 regions.
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 with, during 1992, the
production
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 of
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cocao
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cocoa
cacao
beans
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 was maximum in South
America
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 which accounted for 1,43,000
tons
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, only 29,000
tons
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 of
production
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 was made in
Africa
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. The amount of
production
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 in England was 10,000
tons
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 more than
North
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in North
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 and
central
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America
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. It is interesting to note that
equal
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an equal
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 amount of
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cocao
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cocoa
cacao
beans
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were
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 cultivated by North and
central
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Central
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America
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 during
first
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 and
last
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 year. Probing
further
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,
Africa
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 experienced a rising trend till 1996 and manufacturing reached
at
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1,19,000
tons
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however
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, in
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next
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the next
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 two years, the
production
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 remained
only
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by only
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 a quarter. Surprisingly,
production
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Africa
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in Africa
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, Asia and Oceania followed
a
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an
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 increasing trend over time and reached
at
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4,36,000
tons
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, 76890
tons
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 and 3,89,000
tons
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 respectively up to 1998. There
was
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 67,000
tons
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 of manufacturing in England during 1994 but in another 4
years
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 it dropped by 18,000
tons
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cocao, beans, tons, production, africa, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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