A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer.

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The speaker would prefer a national
curriculum
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for all children up until college
instead
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of
allowing
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Allowing
schools in different regions the freedom to decide on their own curricula. I agree
insofar
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Insofar
as some common
core
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curriculum
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would serve useful purposes for any nation. At the
same
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Same
time,
however
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, individual states and communities should have
some freedom to
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some freedom
augment
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Augment
any
such
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curriculum
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as they see fit;
otherwise
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, a nation's educational system might
defeat
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Defeat
its own purposes in the long
tenn
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Tenn
turn
. A national
core
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curriculum
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would be beneficial to a nation in a number of respects.
First
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of all,
by
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By
providing all children with
fundamental skills
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the fundamental skills
and knowledge, a common
core
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curriculum
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would
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Would
help ensure that our children grow up to become reasonably informed, productive
members
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Members
of society.
In addition
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, a common
core
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curriculum
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would provide a predictable
foundation
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The foundation
Foundation
upon which college administrators and faculty could more easily build curricula and
select
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Select
course materials for freshmen that are neither below nor above their level of
educational
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education
experience
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Experience
.
Finally
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, a
core
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curriculum
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would ensure that all
school-children
a young person attending school (up through senior high school)
schoolchildren
are taught
core
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values
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The values
Values
upon which any democratic society depends to thrive, and even survive--values
such
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as
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As
tolerance of others with different viewpoints, and respect for others.
However
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, a common
curriculum
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that is
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also
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an
exdusive
large in spatial extent or range or scope or quantity
extensive
one would pose certain problems,
which
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Which
might outweigh the benefits, noted above.
First
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of all, on what basis would certain
course
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Course
work be included or excluded, and who would be the final decision- maker? In all
likelihood
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Likelihood
these decisions would be in the hands of federal legislators and regulators, who are
likely
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Likely
to have their own quirky notions of what should and should not be taught to
children
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Children
--notions that may or may not reflect those of most communities, schools, or parents.
Besides
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, government officials are notoriously susceptible to influence-peddling by lobbyists
who
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Who
do not have the best interests of society's children in mind.
Secondly
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, an official, federally sanctioned
curriculum
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would facilitate the dissemination of
propaganda
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Propaganda
and other dogma which because of its biased and one-sided nature undermines
the
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The
very purpose of true education: to enlighten. I can easily foresee the banning of certain text
books
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Books
, programs, and websites which provide information and perspectives that the
government
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The government
Government
might wish to suppress--as some sort of threat to its authority and power.
Although
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this
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scenario might seem far-fetched, these sorts of concerns are being raised
already
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Already
at the
state
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level.
Thirdly
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, the inflexible nature of a uniform national
curriculum
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would preclude the inclusion of
programs
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Programs
, courses, and materials that are primarily of regional or local significance. For
example
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Example
, California requires children at certain grade levels to learn about the history of
particular
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Particular
ethnic groups who make up the
state
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's diverse population. A national
curriculum
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might
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Might
not allow for
this
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feature, and California's youngsters would be worse off
as a result
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of
their
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Their
ignorance about the traditions, values, and cultural contributions of all the people whose
citizenship
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Citizenship
they share. 5
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, it seems to me that imposing a uniform national
curriculum
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would serve to
undermine
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Undermine
the authority of parents over their own children, to even a greater extent than
uniform
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Uniform
state
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laws currently do. Admittedly, laws requiring parents to ensure that their children
receive
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Receive
an education that meets certain minimum standards are well-justified, for the reasons
mentioned
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Mentioned
earlier.
However
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, when
such
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standards are imposed by the
state
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rather than at the
community
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Community
level parents are left with far less power to participate meaningfully in the
decision-making
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Decision-making
process.
This
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problem would only be exacerbated were these decisions left
exclusively
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Exclusively
to federal regulators. In the final analysis, homogenization of elementary and secondary education would amount
to
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To
a double-edged sword. While it would serve as an insurance policy against a future
populated
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Populated
with illiterates and ignoramuses, at the same time it might serve to obliterate cultural
diversity
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Diversity
and tradition. The optimal federal approach, in my view, is a balanced one that
imposes
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Imposes
a basic
curriculum
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yet leaves the rest up to each
state
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--or better yet, to each
community
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Community
.
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