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Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

#nations #wealth #food #education #responsibility #governments #citizens
Some school of thought
believe
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believes
 that strong economies should aid the poor countries in terms of supporting them in their primary needs, while some others think it is due to the local governments to deal with
such
 internal problems.
Although
 both the parties have some strong justifications to support their ideas, I personally agree with the
first
 group more because of several key
factors including
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factors, including
 lack of resources in
such
 poor economies, the fact that we are living in a global society. The
first
 important point I would like to mention is the fact that most of the poor economies are suffering from lack of having enough facilities and resources in the fields
such
 as education and food. As the
first
 may lead to making them even poorer and
also
 increases the number of criminal actions and even worse in some cases potentially making some people joining terroristic groups. While the latter causes several unpleasant results
such
 as
children disability
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a child's disability
child's disability
child disability
 and death. Another important thing is we should not forget all the people in the world are part of one community, the human being. Regardless of all the things makes us different, we all share the same biology.
Therefore
, as a human everybody should try his/her best to do what he can to make the world a pleasant place for the others.
Moreover
, as
it
it is
it's
 mentioned above, some of the negative results
such
 as terrorism may directly affect
the other nations including
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other nations including the
first
 world countries. To put everything in a nutshell, supporting the poor countries to make a better life for their people will cause several pleasant results not only domestically but in some cases internationally and more importantly, it
all is justified by
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is justified by all
 humanity.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interconnected
  • global stability
  • economic self-sufficiency
  • sustainable development
  • capacity-building
  • foreign aid
  • mutual benefits
  • trade relations
  • long-term outcomes
  • dependency
  • moral obligation
  • alleviate poverty
  • humanitarian assistance
  • resource allocation
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