Some people think that young people should spend their free time with their families instead of enjoying outside entertainment. However, others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people said that people should spend their free
time
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with their family
instead
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of enjoying their
time
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with people outside.
However
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, some people disagree and some of them agreed. I think that people should spend their free
time
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with their family. There are several reasons why people should spend quality
time
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with their family.
First
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, family is more important than friends because they always care about you even if
youre
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you're
mad at them.
Second
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, spending
time
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with families can help you get a reward from
god
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God
.
Although
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helping others can get rewards
frrom
a giver or sender
from
god but helping
family
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a family
have bigger rewards.
Third
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, spending quality
time
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with family can make you happier,
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spending
time
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with people outside can feel
love but
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love, but
the love but
the love the love but
with family, you can get love even bigger from your parents,
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a person's brother or sister
siblings
or cousins. These are the reason why we should spend
time
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with our family. People would complain that why should we spend our free
time
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with our family. There are several reasons why other people would disagree.
First
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, they would
assigned
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assign
to do chores
from
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for
their parents. People did not like doing chores
such
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as mopping, sweeping, and doing the dishes.
Second
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, they did not might get enough love
that is
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why he or she prefer
spend
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spending
time
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with their
friend
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friends
because they can hear our problems and having fun.
Third
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, people do not want to hear their parents lecture because they might get bored. These are the reason why some people
dont
do not
don't
agree to spend
time
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with their families. In conclusion, people should spend their quality
time
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with their family.

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