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everyone of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, Increasing consumption of fodder leads to many health problems. I completely agree with the thinking that everyone should consume cuisine from plants and vegetarian outlets as compared to non vegetarian meat.
This
 essay will discuss the many health problems related to the utilisation of food and the benefits of eating vegetarian meal. To commence with there are many reasons why bread from agriculture is better than the fare from animals. The foremost one is
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consumption of food rises the chance of the virus. To take the example of converse in China, which is spread by seafood. Most of the Chinese prefer to eat fodder from different sources. So sometimes it may be possible that some animals have any problem and if human being utilize them,
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 they can suffer from the same problem. So the consumption of food can affect them badly. The
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 foodstuff have many calories due to which majority nowadays suffering from the problem of
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. Increasing weight rises the chance of heart attack and laziness between them, which is a big concern in today's society. To cite it with an example, BBC study shows that majority becomes obese due to the utilisation of meat. Because it is only the product that contain highest calories. After taking everything into consideration, it can be concluded that beside there are many advantages of making foodstuff as a part of their daily routine, but it's disadvantage outweigh its advantages, so it cannot be ignored. So it's been better to take bread full of nutrients and health friendly.

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