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The bar chart compares the use of computers and the Internet in nine Arab countries. Overall, the UAE leads in the number of computer and Internet users in the Arab world. The most striking feature is the users of the Internet in the UAE is more than double the number of computers there.
Firstly
, the UAE is by far the most
develops
Suggestion
developed
developing
 country in terms of the Internet users with around 330 per 1000 inhabitants, followed by Kuwait and Lebanon at approximately 100 and 80 respectively.
In contrast
, countries
such
 as Saudi Arabia and Egypt have less than 20 users per 1000.
On the other hand
, the UAE and Kuwait have about 150 and 130 computers for 1000 people respectively, compared to Saudi Arabia’s 70 and Lebanon’s 60.
However
, in other countries, these values are less than 40.
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