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Digital communication technology, such as email. instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connection between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Although
, advances in technology have made it easier for people to communicate around the globe, but it does not make better relations among them. I think, modern technological inventions have positive effects, but people have made it negative, because they do not use it in an appropriate way.
To begin
 with, the most predominant benefit is people can communicate with each other all the globe, they just need to push the button and connect with them.
For example
, In traditional time people used to write letters,
then
 they wait for response for months and sometime these telegrams missed and did not reach at a person to whom it concern. In today's era, people can connect with each other not only through phone in fact different internet applications are available, even with the help of that they can see each other.
Moreover
, before the existence of the internet people can not update their routine activities on social media, but now
this
 is possible and they can up-to-date everything and share their experience with friends, family and relatives.
However
, the main concern is rising due to the advance inventions is people are going away from one another in the real world. In fact, science made it for positive results and people are addicted of social media. Now it is visible that on social media people have thousands of friends in virtual world, but they do not know about them in reality. Even do not meet each other, just waste their productive time, When communication devices were not existing,
then
 people were more close and share their problems and
also
, assist who was in need, but now it is expiring due to wrong use of these. In conclusion, while scientists make these devices to improve relations among people, but when one does not use these in a good way,
then
 negative concerns take birth.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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