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The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the
population
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 of
Japan
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 in various
years
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 between 1950 to 2055.
In addition
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 to the line
graph
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,graph
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 there is a statistical comparison of
aging
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ageing
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people
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 above 65
years
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. As per data, the
population
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 count
recorded
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is recorded
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for
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apply
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every 5
years
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, starting from 1950 and predicted till the
future
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year
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 2055. In 1950
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Japan
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Japan's
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population
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 was 84.1
million
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. From 1950
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population
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the population
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 grows 4-5
million
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for
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every 5
years
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 till 1970. In 1975 there is significant growth and ended in 111.9
million
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. After 1970 there is gradual growth till
present
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the present
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year
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.
Japan
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also
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 predicated
population
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 for
future
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years
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,
according to
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 the data the
population
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 will fall to 89.9
million
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 in the
year
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 2055.
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, there were records for age
people
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 above 65
years
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. In
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year
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the year
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 1950, 4.1
million
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 senior citizens with a percentage of 4.9%. In 2005 it grows
till
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by
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 20% by 25.7
million
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people
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. As per
future
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 data, it will grow up to 41% aged
people
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 over 65
years
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 with 36.5
million
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. In conclusion,
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Japan
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Japan's
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 total
population
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 will fall in
future
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years
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,
whereas
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aged
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the aged
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people
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population
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 will be increased.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, japan, years, people, future, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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