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Computers are being used more and more in education and so there will soon be no role for the teacher in education

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In future the requirement of a teacher would vanish due to excessive utilization of computers in
education system
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the education system
. In view of the recent exponential developments in technology sector the information systems have taken over complete control over the conventional means of study. Through the course of
this
 essay I shall bring out various facts in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of the subject topic.
To begin
 with, there is hardly any area left where the computers are not being used. The computers have become fully dominant in delivering the learning process in schools and colleges.
if
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If
 the actual statistical data is gathered there would be a far more number of students enrolled via online education system rather seeking physical admissions to learning institutes.
Furthermore
, even the physical books are being replaced with digital libraries, which can be accessed by anyone from anywhere without any expense of buying a physical copy. Computers are efficient in provisioning information for anyone via a simple excess of internet services on single mouse click. The information stored on computers is so vast and detailed that a single teacher would fail in teaching the detailed concepts to the students.
In addition
 the availability of versatile software can present a particular subject of study in a three dimensional model or in a well understandable manner, which a human ideally cannot explain.
Moreover
, the students need not to physically visit any particular location for any tuitions as everything is available on computers within their homes. In conclusion, with the ongoing use of computers I am in full agreement to say that the role of the teacher in education will soon be a thing of
past
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the past
.
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