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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone call in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone call in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the combined
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time spend in
billions
 of
minutes
,
of
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 three
difference
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kind
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 of
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phone
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phones
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 calls in the United Kingdom from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
, local calls were the most popular over the whole period, with national and international calls and
mobiles
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mobile
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 calls in
second
 and
third
 respectively.
However
, national and international calls and mobiles both increased over the period; with mobile
minutes
 increasing significantly,
thus
, narrowing the gap between the three categories in 2002.
Minutes
 spend
in
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 local
call
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calls
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 fluctuated over the time period, with just over 70
billions
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billion
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minutes
 in 1995, peaking at approximately 90
billions
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billion
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minutes
 in 1999 and
then
 steadily decreasing
just
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 over 70 billion
minutes
 in 2002. National and international calls increased gradually year on year, from just under 40
billions
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billion
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minutes
 in 1995
and
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to
peak
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the peak
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 of just over 60
billions
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billion
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minutes
 in 2002.
Mobiles
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Mobile
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calls
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call
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 increased rapidly
with
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from
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 around 5
billions
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billion
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minutes
 in 1995 to around 45
billions
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billion
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minutes
 in 2002. Mobile
phones
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 usage doubled from approximately 20
billions
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billion
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minutes
 in 2000 to 40
billions
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billion
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minutes
 in 2002.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words billions, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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