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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Traffic and housing problems could be solved by moving large companies, factories and their employees to the countryside. Do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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There is currently a contentious argument over whether the
traffic
 and housing issues could be mitigated by changing the location of huge companies, factories and their
employess
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
employers
 from big cities to the
rurual
living in or characteristic of farming or country life
rural
 areas. In my opinion, I totally agree with
this
 opinion because there would be less
number
 of vehicles on the street and there
are
Suggestion
is
 more space for housing construction.
To begin
 with, the main reason why I believe that moving companies, factories and their workers to the rural sites could reduce
traffic
 congestions in large cities is because the
number
 of private vehicles on the street would be significantly decreased.
In other words
, when a substantial
number
 of people move to the countryside, there would be less
number
 of people transporting on the street.
As a result
,
traffic
 problems would rarely happen. Another reason why I support the notion that moving companies, manufactures, and their employees to the countryside could help tackle the housing issues is due to the fact that there are more land sites to build houses for urban citizens. It is
also
 possible to say that people in enormous cities will have enough places to settle down when there are
more space
Suggestion
more spacious
 to erect houses. In conclusion, I completely believe that moving companies, manufactures, and their workers
to
Suggestion
in
 rural locations would resolve the
traffic
 and housing matters in cities because not only the
number
 of vehicles on urban streets would be significantly plummeted, but
also
 there would be more space to build more houses for urban dwellers. Given
this
 situation, It seems that the government should take some steps to encourage people to move and live in rural locations
such
 as reducing taxes for rural people or subsidising them.
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