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Psychologists have known for many years that colour can affect how people feel . For this reason, attention should be given to colour schemes when decorating place such as offices and hospitals.

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T Many years r
esearchs
systematic investigation to establish facts
researches
research
have shown that various
c
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olour
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colours
can have a different influence to h
umans
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human
human's
action
.
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Due to
this
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 reason
,
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many people start to think that offices and hospitals should be c
olorful.
having striking color
colourful
 I totally disagree with
this
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 idea because of
t
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his
plural of "this"
these
two reasons
.
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First
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 of all
,
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office labours need a salary and c
omfort
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comfortable
in their working place. Office workers do not need c
oloura
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
colour a
colours
coloured
in their working company and they do not have time to pay attention to
this
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 action
.
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Some people prefer dark
colour
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,
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,
some of them light
,
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,
it may
also
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 give bad a
ffect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
to their working condition
.
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For example
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,
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people do not like dark
colour
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 due to they feel tired or they might remember some bad situations when they see
such
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 kind of colours
.
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Especially, if working office very colourful and beautiful
,b
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ut w
ages
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wage
law and the office condition is not convenient to workers
,
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,
this
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 h
umans which
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humans, which
human which
human human which
is the member of workers might not be p
leasent
affording pleasure; being in harmony with your taste or likings
pleasant
only seeing colours at work
.
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Secondly
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, c
olours
Suggestion
the colours
do not support patients to resilient from m
alaries
an infective disease caused by sporozoan parasites that are transmitted through the bite of an infected Anopheles mosquito; marked by paroxysms of chills and fever
malaria
.
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Patients
also
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 need peaceful and h
ospitalsull
favorable to life and growth
hospitable
of comfort spices
.
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They do not care about colours in their bad situations
.
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Visitors which c
omes
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come
to see relatives in hospitals
also
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 do not pay attention to it. Sick people need care more than colours in their room
.
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If we talk about doctors
,
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they have enough work
.
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They spend whole time with ill humans and help to them to get well
.
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In one word
,
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,
u
nnecessary
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unnecessarily
in hospitals. To sum up
,
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,
as scientists said
colour
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 might e
ffect
have an effect upon
affect
to peoples good or bad
.
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.
In that case
,
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,
should not paint w
alls
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the walls
without understanding workers character
.
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