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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.
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The given pie charts compare
energy
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 production from various
sources
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 in France in
two
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the two
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 years 1995 and 2005. From an
overall
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 perspective, the percentage of
energy
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 produced
from
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 Petro decreased. Meanwhile, the figures for the rest of
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energy
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the energy
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sources
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 had an opposite trend.
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, coal and gas were the most significant
sources
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 of
energy
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 in both years. In 1995, the proportion of
energy
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 produced from Coal in France was the highest, at 29.80%,
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 figure experienced a slight increase of about 1% to 30.93% in 2005.
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, in the first year, the percentage of
energy
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 created from Gas made up
for
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29.63%, which rose modestly to 30.31% in 2005. Regarding the remaining
sources
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 of
energy
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, the percentages of
energy
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 production from Nuclear and other resources grew sharply to 10.10% and 9.10% respectively.
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,
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 figure for Petro made up 29.27% in 1995, which decreased significantly to 19.55% by the end of the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, sources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear energy
  • Renewable energy
  • Non-renewable energy
  • Technological advancements
  • Government policy
  • Environmental policies
  • Investment in renewable technologies
  • Traditional energy sources
  • Coal usage
  • Natural gas
  • Environmental regulations
  • Energy consumption
  • Energy production levels
  • Proportion
  • Broader trends
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