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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Education is an important part of every person's life. It
can affects
Suggestion
can affect
 an individual’s life in various aspects,
such
 as his or her personality, prestige in society, salary, social status, and so on.
As a result
, parents do many efforts to improve their children’s education. Whether offering money for each high grade that school-age children get in school is a good idea or not? Personally, I agree with the offering financial awards to young children. There are some reasons why I feel
this
 way, and I would explore a few primary ones here. One of the primary reasons is that it can encourage school-age student to study harder. To be specific, our brain shows a positive response to praise. Scientists discover that humans and even some animals,
such
 as primates, reinforce the habits and actions that led to a good consequence like as getting
award
Suggestion
awards
. So, if a young person
receive
Suggestion
receives
 money for a high mark and tastes its pleasure, he or she continues to repeat his or her effort to get it again and again.
On the other hand
, if a person doesn't receive a positive feedback from his/her effort, gradually loses his/her interest to repeat the same amount of effort, especially at these ages.
This
 fact taught me that assigning awards can be a good idea. There is another factor that deserves some words here. Parents can use
this
 manner to improve their children’s educational weaknesses. I mean, they can design a wise program to raise their children’s grade progressively. They can increase the amount of financial awards step to step alongside the increase in the grades that their children get in school. Of course, there are some disadvantages with
this
 approach,
such
 as study just for getting money not for
sake
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the sake
 of learning that may be a serious harm for their education. But as I have said, I support
this
 idea because of its effect on student’s encouragement and improvements.

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