The average standard of people’s health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the era of everything changed
fastly
with rapid movements
quickly
vastly
, there is an opinion that
human's
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human
health
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could be worse in the
future
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. I agree
this
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view because
firstly
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, more and more non-organic food will be
customed
made according to the specifications of an individual
custom-made
costumed
customised
and
secondly
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, serious pollution causes negative effects for the every generation. The amount of biochemical foods will be applied increasingly. The climate change leads to a mushrooming number of wild animals die out and plants which are not suitable to be
grew
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grown
on the earth.
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means people have to
innormal
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in normal
means to solve the problem of the population growth. In
this
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case, feeding the fishes who can grow faster and increasing the times and amount of fertilising for some certain plants and even change the creatures' genes to make them more suitable for new environment become more and more common.
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, in some countries, some dealers feed pills to fishes, which makes their fishes to be mature quicker in order to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
the needs of the market which results in many
health
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problems for young children.
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,
verious
of many different kinds purposefully arranged but lacking any uniformity
various
pollutions are impacting on people's
health
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. Some people might argue that our
lifespans
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life spans
are longer than the past and it will be better in the
future
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with
technology developing
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technology in developing
developing technology
.
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, the lifespan is not totally equaling the degree of the
health
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. The pollution of the atmosphere and water could cause
cough
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a cough
or other chronic for
long time
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a long time
.
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, according to a statistic in China in 2015, the proportion of disease of the lung was nearly ten times higher than 30 years ago.
This
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situation is influencing the people at the moment and will be kept to influence our
future
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generations. In conclusion, in the
future
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, it is possible that
human's
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human
health
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will be lower, because of the application of more non-organic foods and the threat of pollutions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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