More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Undoubtedly, obesity has always been regarded as one of the most controversial health issues. The percentage of young children, who suffer from

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phenomenal overweight, most remarkably in wealthier states has witnessed a rise, which is attributed to certain factors. Apparently, the consequences of heavy weight in children can extend to badly affect not only those kids' lives, but their families as well. Seldom is a civilized society without health

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development is aimed at the welfare of the citizens.

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connection is assured since the higher technology individuals use in their everyday life, the lazier they will become, depending on machines to act

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of their muscles.

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, physical exercise has been eliminated from families' to do lists and

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the children

lacked the models to follow and acquired idleness.

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, rapid lifestyle has resulted in the preference for fast food whose calories children fail to resist even if they are warned against

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junk meals. Obese children are not the only victims of

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problem; parents, whole families and communities may suffer on various scales. Those kids

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the pleasures of outdoor activities their peers share, which negatively influence their social attitudes. Families, importantly concerned parents, are doomed to fight with self-blame and anxiety about the future of their children. A clear example of

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suffering is an old friend of mine who spent many years in America when he showed overweight signs during

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the first years

of primary school onwards. I still remember when he shed tears on some teasing remarks during fitness classes.

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, his tears have never managed to prevent hypertension or lethal cholesterol from spoiling his present life. In conclusion, advancement is partly to blame for the phenomenon of

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, the impacts of the dilemma lead everyone to suffer. My firm conviction is that the problem

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

318 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

obesity
sedentary
caloric intake
processed foods
fast food culture
screen time
metabolic disorders
healthcare expenditure
lifestyle diseases
preventative strategies
nutritional education
public health policy
body mass index (BMI)
emotional well-being
stigmatization
exercise regimen
eating habits
junk food
socioeconomic factors
health literacy

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More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Fully explain your ideas

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