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Students at schools and universities learn far more from lessons with teachers than from others sources (such as the internet, television). To what extent do you agree or disagree? Introduction

#students #schools #universities #lessons #teachers #sources #internet #television #introduction
Today, new technologies,
such
 as the
Internet
 and television,
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 made great changes in education. In spite of
this
, many people still
believes
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 that
traditional
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 education system is more useful when it comes to
impart
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 knowledge
on
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students
. In my personal opinion,
although
 the role of
teachers
 in the classroom is undeniably essential, we still cannot ignore other sources of learning
To begin
 with,
teachers
 can stimulate interest and it is an undeniable fact that interested
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people tend to learn more. They can keep
students
 focused on study. A student studying by himself through
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internet
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 and TV may get bored and stop studying.
Teachers
 can provide a faster and simpler way to present
information
 to the
students
. They can come down to the level of a student and so are definitely better than computers.
In addition
,
teachers
 are role models for
students
. They are scholars in action. They not only teach academic subjects
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 but
also
 many social skills.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 true that the
internet
 is an ocean of knowledge. You can get
information
 about any topic on Earth from the
internet
. But there is no authenticity of
this
information
. What
information
 to get and from where to get requires a lot of expertise.
The television
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also
 has a lot of educative programmes but
students
 still need the guidance of the
teachers
 at all stages of learning.
Teachers
 can make even
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the
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dull and boring subjects seem interesting. So definitely
students
 learn more from
teachers
. For those kind of
students
, they might feel more comfortable learning with the
Internet
 or television.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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