In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinions on this?
In many parts of the
world people
are engaged in lots of paid Accept comma addition
world, people
work
and these people not only include adults but
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adults, but
also
children at the age
of 10-15 years and some are even below the age
of 10 years also
. The work
allocated to them could be of many types including labour, acting, tutoring and various other type
of Suggestion
types
work
. There is a particular age
for people to get into some paid work
from where they become more matured and responsible. Children at such
a low age
will not be able to understand the meaning of work
rather they would just indulge in money
that they are getting in reward for the work
done by them which will not teach them a valuable experience
. In other terms if they are assigned a work
in which they are also
able to develop new skills by learning and become more mature by experience
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
such
a work
becomes a valuable one and teaches children lessons of life which are worth remembering for the whole life.
There are many parts of the world where poor children because of their deprivity
have to moral perversion; impairment of virtue and moral principles
depravity
work
on
restaurants and buildings to earn a living and feed their family as well. Suggestion
in
at
with
Such
children start at such
a young age
that there
childhood is totally ruined in doing that of them or themselves
their
work
. They are not able to get enough education and are not able to be developed. If similar kinds of work
could be done by some other children with their parents having enough money
then
it could make children indulge in a feeling of money
mindedness
which could ruin a child
's future as that child
will not be able to focus on their studies and as a result
will give less importance to studies as compared to the money
they are getting to fulfill
their desired needs.
Acting is put in effect
fulfil
also
prevalent amongst children at a low age
and parents find that fascinating and in order to promote that they take them to reality shows where their acting skills are judged and following that they take part in the competition in which they might win or lose. Losing a competition at such
a high level could make them feel dejected at such
an early age which
altogether ruins their childhood and wakes up a feeling of competitiveness in those children. Accept comma addition
age, which
On
each and every day of competition children Suggestion
With
feel
nervous, pressurised, stressed and anxious about their Suggestion
feels
performance which
could make them prone to Accept comma addition
performance, which
such
a chronic disease of stress at such
a young age
that some of them are even not able to cope up with it which ruins their life as a whole.
On the other
hand if
they are given Accept comma addition
hand, if
work
experience
in the field in which they are interested in or which makes them learn and grow as an individual at an early age
then
why not. There are many examples of young adults becoming a CEO of a reputed company at an early age which
makes them far ahead of people who are at par with their Accept comma addition
age, which
age
. This
opportunity is only provided to them if they are working and developing new skills at an early age
of a teenager. This
might increase their learning power and improve their abilities and skills. All of the efforts are successful if the child
has laerning
attitude as compared to a Suggestion
learned
learning
learnt
money
minded attitude.
To encapsulate above mentioned points and examples strengthen my stand and i
disagree with the statement that paid refers to the speaker or writer
I
work
will provide a valuable experience
and is important for learning and taking responsibility rather education is more important for a child
as compared to work
experience
, a child
may get work
experience
later on but education is very important to get completed at an early age
which makes a child
aware of their surroundings and conditions on the basis of which they can take their next
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