Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

One
of the most conspicuous trends of todays world is a colossal upsurge in the
mumber
the property possessed by a sum or total or indefinite quantity of units or individuals
number
numbers
of people believing that the courage to contesting should be taught to offsprings while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
resist it by saying that collaborative thinking is the best to
became
Suggestion
become
useful adults. I agree with the former view and
herw
in or at this place; where the speaker or writer is
here
in
this
essay, I would discuss both views in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, there are
delige
a conversation between two persons
dialogue
of arguments in favour of my stance. The most preponderant
one
is that by encouragement of competition in the children, they became dedicated towards their future and do
lot
Suggestion
a lot
lots
of
hardwork
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hard work
to achieve
sucess
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
successes
in their lives and they
also
know the value of
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
by
competing others
Suggestion
competing with others
. It
cannot
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can not
only contribute to became self-confident but
also
lead to numerous other benefits in various fields
such
as to get name and fame in life. Thanks to
wide range
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a wide range
the wide range
of advantages it
offer
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offers
, masses can enhance the quality and productivity of their lives with much ease, efficacy and
conveience
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
. Needless to say all these merits stand
one
in a good stead as far as
aguementing
enlarge or increase
augmenting
their chances of prosperity and
excellance
the quality of excelling; possessing good qualities in high degree
excellence
is concerned.
Furthermore
, the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
pivotal aspect of the aforementioned propositions is that it is not only likely to help
one
excel
ans
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
thrive in varied areas.
Besides
, education towards strife helps the children to be prepared for
further
competitioms
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competitions
competition
in their life because today's era is a
competative
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
era and if people teach their offsprings about competition in vary early
age
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age, then
then
they will
became
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become
perfet
being complete of its kind and without defect or blemish
perfect
to face any
challange
take exception to
challenge
and difficult situation in throughout their lives and acquire
sucess
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
easily.
For instance
, the study results published by the government of Australia in March 2014 and May 2016
clearly indicates
Suggestion
clearly indicate
that rivalry is
critcal
marked by a tendency to find and call attention to errors and flaws
critical
critically
and
crutial
of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis
crucial
for
sucess
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
in any sector.
Hence
, many are in favour of
this
perception.
However
, a
sectin
a self-contained part of a larger composition (written or musical)
section
of society contradicts the above said view
poin
a geometric element that has position but no extension
point
pane
by saying that no
one
is perfect in everything so individuals
tech
impart skills or knowledge to
teach
their
adolesents
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
adolescents
about co-operation because when they work together no
one
can
stuck
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stick
them from
sucess
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
sauces
successes
because they are well known of their strengths and weaknesses and support each other in
difficult situation
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difficult situations
a difficult situation
. It
also
helps to develop social skills in them.
Therefore
, it is apparent why few are against
this
notion. In
compendiun
the act of combining things to form a new whole
compounding
, I would like to state that both the above said views are valid and relevant, but if I consider both. Logically, the former
one
that sense of competition should be encouraged is more powerful and effective.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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