Nowadays, the multiple kinds of crime rate were rising compared to the last two decades ago in almost all countries. The essay will examine the main causes of increasing misconduct and possible solutions of this problem.

Nowadays many
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Nowadays, many
people
work
long hours, leaving them little
time
for leisure activities.There are some advantages in
this
situation, but personally
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
feel
their
in or at that place
there
are more disadvantages. The advantages include the possibilities to earn more money, if employers pay for overtime for extra hour worked.
This
can be a real bonus if someone is saving
withva
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with a
with va
particular goal in mind: a holiday,
for example
, or saving money to buy
house
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houses
or flat. Another advantage might be that more
time
spent
at
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on
job enables a more thorough understanding of the job.Some professions
such
as law and accountancy require familiarity
witha
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with a
wide range of rules and requirements and these cannot
be all learned
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all be learned
through study; they have to be learned on the job.
FOr
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For
younger people there is
also
the sheer stimulus of being involved in something they enjoy, so that they do not object to, or count, the hours they spend at
work
. Unfortunately, if people do not have enough
time
to relax
,
Accept space
,
there are quite major risks associated with
this
. Health often suffers, either physically or mentally, and sometimes both.Taking
time
out for physical leisure activities has positive effects on health though the release of chemicals that make us feel better both physically and mentally.Other leisure activities may involve spending
time
with
group
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a group
of people, activating skills other than those used at
work
and
thus
encouraging supportive social
netwroks
an interconnected system of things or people
networks
.
Frinedship
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Friendship
can
also
be
weakend
impaired by diminution
weakened
waked
awakened
because of not making enough
time
to stay in touch, but using only a little of your free
time
to have a meal or go to cinema with someone helps to maintain that
friendhsip
the state of being friends (or friendly)
friendship
.Listening to your friend's problems, or talking through your own, reinforces your friendship with them, as well as allowing you to switch off mentally from the things that have been happening at
work
.
This
'distancing' from
work
helps you to get things back into
persepective
a way of regarding situations or topics etc.
perspective
and can sometimes help you to find solutions to
matter
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matters
that have been bothering you. Within a family
siituation
the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time
situation
station
a
partenr
a person's partner in marriage
partner
may feel neglected if the other one spends long hours at
work
, or a child may feel neglected because mummy/daddy
is
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has been
never around for birthdays, school performances or vital sports matches.
This
lack of involvement is a major contributor to family breakdown, which in turn has wider
repurcussions
a remote or indirect consequence of some action
repercussions
in
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on
our society.
work
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Work
is a major part of our
lives
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life
and it is to be hoped that many find it enjoyable,
challanging
requiring full use of your abilities or resources
challenging
, and stimulating, but it is important to recognise the need for
work
-life balance and to ensure that
this
is put into practice.

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