Some people believe that all teenagers should have to do unpaid work during their free time in order to help the local community. They think this would benefit the teenagers doing the unpaid work but also society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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the youth during their extra time is fruitful for the community and the person both, in terms of enhancing social adhesion and learning of skills. I agree that the youngsters ought to spend free moments in social services voluntarily and freely. Unpaid communal works improve social relations among the people and the teenagers. The services provided for humanity earn kindness and respect from the humanity leading to strengthened relationships between the residents. People come more close in terms of understanding the hardships and requirements on one hand and happiness in the other hand.
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cohesion keeps the masses connected
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avoiding loneliness and social issues. The benefits are for both the individual and public. Recently the Quaid e Azam University has made it compulsory for its students to work in social services for 1 month during summer vacations.
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, community based honorary services produce skilled workers at an earlier stage. During social engagements teenagers are employed in different types of works
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getting early and in depth knowhow about different fields. Ultimately, they are ready to enter the practical life and ready to adopt it easily.
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, with work experience, they are at advantage of getting jobs. Availability of skilled manpower eases the concerns of society which it would have faced had the manpower been deficient. Students of NUST with a field experience gained during the internship, are at an advantage in job priority. In conclusion, community services which are done by young people without honorarium are fruitful regarding social relationships and employment and I support
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