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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Businesses should do anything they can to make a profit. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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I do not agree with the statement that businesses should do anything they can to make a
profit
. I state my opinion on the following points.
First
 of all, every
company
 must have its moral code. It means that a
company
 should treat its clients properly and respect their rights. Of cause a
company
 may lose a part of its
profit but
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profit, but
security
Suggestion
the security
 of its clients must be on the
first
 place.
Otherwise
, clients will switch to another
company
 and never be back.
For instance
, a few years ago "Jonson&Jonson" produced a new type of painkillers. Unfortunately,
this
 product was not tested properly.
As a result
 of
this
 many people died and received
injures
any physical damage to the body caused by violence or accident or fracture etc.
injuries
. The president of the
company
 made a crucial decision to call back all painkillers from all distributors and pay to all injured customers for their treatment. It cost a lot of money for the
company but
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company, but
 it saved its image and clients. It was a very difficult decision, but the president of the
company
 understood that it would cost him even more in the future because he would not be able to return clients' respect. Loosing customers
means
Suggestion
mean
 for a
company
 loosing its
profit
.
Second
 of all, in order to succeed in the modern world companies have to compete with each other. Many companies lose their
profit
 decreasing prices on their products. They do not aspire for extra
profit but
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profit, but
 for clients' satisfaction. Companies do it because they want their products sold and their customers satisfied. They offer discounts, free delivery, free service, free Internet access, good return service, etc. All these are done to make their old customers happy and attract new clients. To sum up, I think a
company
, which the only goal is
profit
 will not succeed nowadays.
Otherwise
, companies that respect their clients and want to see them satisfied will make a fortune.
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