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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Businesses should do anything they can to make a profit. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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I do not agree with the statement that businesses should do anything they can to make a
profit
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. I state my opinion on the following points.
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 of all, every
company
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 must have its moral code. It means that a
company
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 should treat its clients properly and respect their rights. Of cause a
company
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 may lose a part of its
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profit but
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profit, but
security
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the security
 of its clients must be on the
first
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 place.
Otherwise
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, clients will switch to another
company
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 and never be back.
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, a few years ago "Jonson&Jonson" produced a new type of painkillers. Unfortunately,
this
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 product was not tested properly.
As a result
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 of
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 many people died and received
injures
any physical damage to the body caused by violence or accident or fracture etc.
injuries
. The president of the
company
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 made a crucial decision to call back all painkillers from all distributors and pay to all injured customers for their treatment. It cost a lot of money for the
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company but
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company, but
 it saved its image and clients. It was a very difficult decision, but the president of the
company
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 understood that it would cost him even more in the future because he would not be able to return clients' respect. Loosing customers
means
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mean
 for a
company
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 loosing its
profit
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.
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 of all, in order to succeed in the modern world companies have to compete with each other. Many companies lose their
profit
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 decreasing prices on their products. They do not aspire for extra
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profit but
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profit, but
 for clients' satisfaction. Companies do it because they want their products sold and their customers satisfied. They offer discounts, free delivery, free service, free Internet access, good return service, etc. All these are done to make their old customers happy and attract new clients. To sum up, I think a
company
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, which the only goal is
profit
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 will not succeed nowadays.
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, companies that respect their clients and want to see them satisfied will make a fortune.
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