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Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say trees should be planted in the vacant area of cities and towns .while other believe housing facilities should be built instead. Do agree or disagree?

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Trees are
precious gift
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a precious gift
precious gifts
 of nature to earth as they have many beneficial qualities. An array of masses
believe
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believes
 that trees need to be planted in spare spaces in urban areas because they purify the polluted air. While, others support building houses rather than planting trees because it makes life more comfortable and convenient. But, in my opinion, they both are
significance
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significant
signed
 and need to arrange in a balanced way. To commence with, all living creatures need pure air to breath to stay healthy, planting trees decline the pollution rate as trees act like filters that absorb all the harmful gases and keep the environment clean.
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, heat in cities can be better controlled by having more trees which filter the sun's heat and offer shade.
This
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 ultimately lowers the temperature.
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, trees offer urban wildlife a better environment to live in and lay a part in the ecosystem a city.
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, constructing houses have several merits.
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, without more housing, a city is unable to grow and develop which is essential in a world with an increasing population.
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, shelter is a basic requirement for
life but
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life, but
 urban space is limited and priority should be given to shelters rather than creating parks.
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, lack of affordable housing can lead to rising crime rates.
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Thus, by
 having more houses, there are more
oppurtunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
 for everyone to get houses. To
conclude there
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conclude, there
 are several benefits
to
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of
 planting trees in vacant areas of cities as well as housing facilities. So it is essential to make a balance between both facilities.

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