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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter ● describe the problem with the equipment ●explain how this problem is affecting your work ●say what you want the shop or company to do

#work #home #piece #equipment #job #shop #company #●explain #●say
Dear Mr. Purnomo, I am writing
this
 letter to bring to your
intention
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attention
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 the problem I face in my home. The issues with my
laptop
 keyboard
due
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are due
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 to some disfunctional
button
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buttons
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. so I find
difficult
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it difficult
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 to open my file as can not type anything.
For
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In
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 the past weeks, I bought
this
laptop
 from your shop. I had not found any mistake with
this
laptop
.
Like usually
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Usually
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, I operate
this
laptop
 and continue to finish my job. The screen, keyboard, mouse, and speaker
was
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were
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 in good condition.
However
, yesterday when I
type
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typed
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in
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into
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Microsoft
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the Microsoft
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 Word application, I
find
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found
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 out that
space
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the space
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, enter, and all of
number
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the number
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 buttons
is
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were
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 out of order. I
really
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was really
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 frustrated as these
button
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buttons
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is
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were
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 crucial when I did my task. Given the circumstances, I would like your immediate intervention to resolve
such
 as
give
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giving
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 my money back. If it is not possible, please give me another
laptop
 which has better
spesification
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specification
specifications
 and all of
equipment
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 has good function. I have attached some photos in
this
 letter for you to take appropriate action to tackle
this
 issue. A prompt reply will be highly appreciated. Thank you in advance Yours Faithfully Yohanes
Submitted by patricius.yohanes on

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to enhance clarity. For example, one paragraph for the problem description, one for the impact on your work, and one for the requested action.
task achievement
Minor grammatical errors exist, such as 'find' instead of 'found' and 'can not' instead of 'cannot'. These should be corrected to improve the overall writing quality.
coherence cohesion
The letter includes a polite greeting and closing, which contributes to the formality of the tone.
task achievement
The writer clearly states the problem, its impact on their work, and a proposed solution, which effectively covers all required points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • malfunctioning
  • error messages
  • troubleshooting
  • productivity
  • affecting
  • equipment
  • brand
  • model
  • repair
  • replacement
  • refund
  • delays
  • critical
  • impacting
  • user manual
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