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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where the conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or The Antarctic. What areNowd disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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The tourism is on the rise with more communications among the natives of various parts of the world,
as a result
 adventurers are inclined more towards the areas with hard and potentially dangerous situations. With these trends, tourists face many hazards, but accidents and diseases are of more concerns.
Firstly
, visiting far off places with extremes of environments, raises the probability of mis happenings. They have to travel on local transport with bad and overcrowded roads, so the risks of falls and collisions is greatly increased.
Moreover
, the adventures at extreme areas, requires the individual to exert physically like hiking, mountaineering, again risking for mishaps like trauma.
For instance
, in 2016 an Italian couple was rescued near K2, with multiple fractures from falling.
Secondly
, the visitors of
such
 places are prone to various ailments. Facing lots of changes in temperature and the weather conditions, they develop many illnesses like traveller's diarrhoea, mountain sickness.
Furthermore
, due to social contacts, they contract communicable diseases which are endemic in those parts.
For example
, in a survey about 10% travellers to the Cholistan deserts have been found infested with Hookworm. In conclusion, mis happenings and ailments are the major adversaries, which the visitors of the difficult areas face.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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