IELTS Academic Writing Task 1/ Graph Writing - Bar Chart: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

IELTS Academic Writing Task 1/ Graph Writing - Bar Chart:

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
GRAPHICS in
THIS
TEST introduce the reader
about
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THE TOP TEN
COUNTRIES
WITH THE HIGHEST Allocation ON
TRAVEL
IN 2014. THE display of EXPENDITURE IS BASED ON THE CALCULATION OF US $
tons
.
COUNTRIES
from the information
graph
CONTAINs
CHINA
, the UNITED STATES, GERMANY, the UNITED KINGDOM, SINGAPORE, SOUTH KOREA, HONG KONG, INDIA, MALAYSIA,
TAIWAN
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and TAIWAN
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. The
GRAPH
was using
MULTIPLE
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a MULTIPLE
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OF 20 SCALES WHICH STARTS FROM 0 TO 120. THE
GRAPH
was SHOWED WITH HORIZONTAL DISPLAY WHICH IS ACCOMPANIED by THE SEPARATOR LINE IN THE SCALE WITH VALUE 4.
THIS
GRAPH
WAS RELATED TO THE SOURCE FROM UNWTO
COUNTRIES
WITH THE HIGHEST COSTUMER expend ON
TRAVEL
2014 FALL INTO
CHINA
. The number one COUNTRY WITH CONCENTRATE 110 US $
tons
.
Next
RATED ACCORDED TO THE UNITED STATES AND GERMANY WITH 85 US $
tons
, and
also
followed by the UNITED KINGDOM WITH 55 US $
tons
, SOUTH KOREA AND HONG KONG WITH 20 US $
tons
, INDIA WITH 15 US $
tons
,
then
MALAYSIA WITH 12 US $
tons
. The
LAST
RATED in
graphic
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the graphic
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showed by the country of
TAIWAN
WITH 10 US $
tons
consumed. COMPARISON OF DONATE consumer ON
TRAVEL
CHINA
WITH
TAIWAN
CONTAINED 100 US $
tons
. As the
graph
show
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shows
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the purchaser EXPENDed ON
CHINA
IS 11 TIMES LARGER THAN
TAIWAN
. THERE ARE 2 (two)
COUNTRIES
THAT HAVE THE EQUALIZATION OF SPENDING COSTUMERS each other. Some
COUNTRIES
IN ASIA
was
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were
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telling us to CONTINUE and DOMINATE COMPARED TO OTHER continents. The conclusion from the diagram was telling us
about
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how much money
spent
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was spent
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on
travel
2014
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in 2014
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. We have known the
People
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People's
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Republic of
China
BECOMES THE BIGGEST SPENDING patron IN 2014.
CHINA
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CHINA'S
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NEIGHBOURING
COUNTRIES
, HONG KONG AND
TAIWAN
ARE INCLUDED. THAT
ALSO
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IS ALSO
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RELATED TO
NUMBER
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THE NUMBER
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OF POPULATIONS WHERE THERE ARE POTENTIALS FOR VERY BIG TRAVELS
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, travel, tons, graph, china, taiwan with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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