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Universities should allocate the same amount of money to students' sports activities as they allocate to their libraries. To what extent do you agree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and give any relevant example or experience you have to support your answer.

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There is a debate on whether the budget universities spend on sports activities should be equal to that of libraries. I strongly agree with the statement due to the benefits of sports which will be explained in the following essay. It is true that sports provide students with good health which is essential for their studies. If students are ill or not physically fit, they will find it difficult to catch up with their lessons
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 studying is stressful to some extent, which requires students to be physically healthy
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 being smart.
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, playing sports can boost students’ physical strength and allow them to perform better at school.
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, students can learn valuable skills through sports activities. Team sports
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 as football and basketball teach them the importance of teamwork and collaboration skill. Meanwhile, individual sports like swimming and running enhance their independence. These
skills play
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 a significant role in their studies because
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school students
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school, students
 will work together for group assignments or by themselves for individual projects.
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, these transferable skills can help students obtain success in their future careers.
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 but not least, sports activities allow students to discover more about themselves, especially their hidden talents and passions. It is the fact that some students do not know what they are passionate about until they start playing sports. They might pick up a sport to play for pleasure at the beginning,
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 gradually explore their
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 at that activity and
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 turn it into their profession. Meanwhile, for those who are gifted
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 sports, these activities can nurture and polish their talents,
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 encouraging them to pursue their dreams. To conclude, to stay healthy physically and mentally is as vital as being good at academic.
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, universities are advised to invest an equal amount
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