Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared with the problems of adult life than the children who are brought up by wealthy parents.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Family is the most pivotal part
for
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of
every
individuals
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individual
because it is the support system in each and every
situations
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situation
.
offsprings
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Offsprings
who belong from poor families
,
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,
they
knows
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know
all the things how to deal with happiness and sorrow in their
future
life
because of their circumstances which they faced compared to rich families' children.I totally agree with
this
notion and the reasons for my inclination are articulated in trailed paragraphs. There are ample of reasons why the poor families' children have
better understanding
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a better understanding
towards the
future
problems.
First
and foremost reason is that the dearth of
money
.
Further
,
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,
such
types of students do not have sufficient
money
for enjoying their lives with others and they easily understand the all
money
related issues.Sometime, they leave their study and aid their parents to feed the family and ultimately
,
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,
they cannot
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their goals.To quote an instance
,
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,
in the state of Bihar
,
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,
all the dwellers are underprivileged
,
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,
so the parents could not afford the expense of their children's study
,
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,
hence
they join them in their small business to earn
money
. What is more
,
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,
such
types of children easily solve their problems in
future
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the future
because they observe their parents who faced major poverty.In some cases
,
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,
they
makes
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make
a big
goals
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goal
to give
better
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a better life
life
for parents in their old-age.
Secondly
, they have adequate knowledge about how to manage
money
,
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,
so they cannot feel hindrance in their adult
life
.
On the contrary
, children of wealthy families
,
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,
they did not face any obstacle during their
life
,
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,
so they cannot the value of
money
.
First
of all
,
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,
they live
luxurious
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a luxurious life
life
since their childhood
,
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,
so they have not sufficient knowledge about
money
management and waste it on unnecessary things.
Consequently
,
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,
they face major problems in their
future
life
.
In most probable
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Most probable
cases
,
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,
such
types of offsprings diverted their mind towards violent activities in their adult
life
due to
power
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the power
of
money
.
Therefore
,
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,
they cannot become
best person
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a better person
better person
better people
the best person
better persons
in their following
life
as their fathers. Agglomerating all the points elaborated above, it can be concluded that the children of poor families
are easily deal
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are easily dealt
are easily dealing
have easily dealt
easily deal
with their all problems related to
money
rather than the rich background's offspring.

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