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Some people think the governments should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles in order to solve the environments problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is irrefutable that massive usage of fossil fuels exacerbates the environmental issues.
Hence
, many people believe if
price
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the price
 of
fuel
 is raised
then
 it would solve all the
biohazards
the common European short-winged hawk
buzzards
. I do not agree that just focussing on one specific area which is
tiny part
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a tiny part
 of
this
 humongous problem is the solution;
this
 essay will discuss why. Taking
such
 measure does more damage compared to the benefit. Because of
increase
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the increase
 in
fuel
 rates, there could be conflicts amongst the common man and the administration. Having taken
such
 step of hiking prices would fill public with rage lead to curfews and
sloganeering
,
for instance
,
hence
, disrupting balance in the society.
Moreover
, despite the fact that traffic might decrease due to
this
 step, motor companies will suffer and it would affect the national economy directly.
However
, if more effective ways like using electricity produced by solar energy or other renewable energy sources are used to power
the motor vehicles
Suggestion
motor vehicles than the
the motor vehicles than
then
 above stated issues can be governed.
On the other hand
, major air pollutants are the gases
and and
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 residues from the industrial
waste
. Carbon emission from vehicles
doesnt
does not
doesn't
 affect the ecosystem much as compared to toxic
waste
 generated by industries. All kinds of greenhouse gases like nitrogen, methane, carbon
monooxide
an oxide containing just one atom of oxygen in the molecule
monoxide
 etc.
are
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Are
 discharged by manufacturing companies without treating them,
this
 in turn leads to spike in
temprature which
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temperature, which
temperature which
temperatures which
 directly impacts the climate in
detrimental way
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a detrimental way
detrimental ways
.
Therefore
, having appropriate
waste
 management facilities to treat
contaminated
Suggestion
Contaminated
 and toxic
waste
 before releasing into
environment
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the environment
 would help and
expidite
speed up the progress of; facilitate
expedite
expedites
 the process of saving our ecosystem. In the nutshell,
this
 essay discussed the reasons why raising
fuel
price
 is not
a
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an
 effective answer to environmental
problems including
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problems, including
decline
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the decline
 in
nation's economy
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the nation's economy
 due hit in motor companies and industrial
waste
 is
teh
definite article
the
 major catalyst to the
biohazard
Suggestion
Biohazard
.
Hence
, rather than increasing
fuel
price
 having proper
waste
 management facilities should be the focus. In my
opnion
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
, I disagree that just
fuel
price
 hike is not the answer to solve environmental problems.

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