‘Prevention is better than cure’ and that’s why more money from health budget should be spent on promoting a healthy lifestyle to prevent illness. Therefore it is wise to spend more money to prevent illness than to spend on curing people who are already ill.

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I strongly agree with the statement, “Prevention is better than cure”.

Likewise it

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Likewise, it

always depends on an individual to take preventive measures rather than treating an illness at

later stage

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a later stage

. Of course not everything is evident and can be

analyzed

examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts

analysed

, few ailments are

unpredictable even

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unpredictable, even

for a person who is following

good diet

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a good diet

Hence promoting

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Hence, promoting

healthy lifestyle should have more budgets. In my

opinion it

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opinion, it

is better to spend more to follow a healthy diet and workout regularly. By

this

we can make sure that our

body

stays in fit shape to avoid unnecessary illness like muscle and joint pains.

Also

yoga helps to keep our whole

body

relaxed and keeps our mind stress free. Investing in a gymnasium

classes

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class

where cardio exercises are done on

regular basis

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a regular basis

keeps

you

of you or yourself

your

heart in good shape. Good diet includes drinking lots of water to keep our

body

hydrated. Eating lots of fruits with

fiber

a slender and greatly elongated substance capable of being spun into yarn

fibre

, iron and

vitamins

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vitamin

contents keeps our digestive system clean and provides necessary nutritional value

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our blood and skin. Drinking milk improves the calcium content and provides strength and stability to our bones. I would like to share an example of my

neighbor

a person who lives (or is located) near another

neighbour

neighbours

Aaron, who is 40 years old and has undergone a surgery recently.

Although

he used to have a good food and work out regularly, he never used to sleep on time for a minimum of seven hours and as well never drank

sufficient quantity

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a sufficient quantity

of water on

daily basis

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a daily basis

This

resulted in kidney stones and he had to get operated twice in a span of one year. In

this

case Aaron ended up spending more for hospital bills rather than on his lifestyle. I would not say that it is a bad practice to spend on curing people who are already ill as each life matters.

However we

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However, we

need to develop a habit that strengthens our

body

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bodies

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develops immunity towards diseases and sustains on

long run

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long runs

a long run

the long run

. We get one life and it is very precious.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Relevant & specific examples

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329 words

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‘Prevention is better than cure’ and that’s why more money from health budget should be spent on promoting a healthy lifestyle to prevent illness. Therefore it is wise to spend more money to prevent illness than to spend on curing people who are already ill.

Fully explain your ideas

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Increasing the price is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some countries are struggling with an increase in the rate of crime. Many people think that having more police on the streets is the only way to reduce crime. To what extent do you agree?

Some people think that the best way to resolve environmental problems is to increase fuel and vehicles’ prices. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say this is a positive trend, while others argue that it leads to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.