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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements?

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The
internet
, no doubt, is a tool that has changed the whole world into a global village. But, has it
also
 changed people to socialize?
This
 essay will discuss reasons as to why it does not encourage people not to make friends.
Firstly
, the
internet
 has made communication easier among humans because
location
 is never a barrier anymore, to relay any information.
Also
, meeting old high school friends has just gotten easier.
For example
, an individual can complete a degree programme online; receive lectures, write tests and examinations at a different
location
 of the school.
This
 has made education easier via communication on the
internet
.
Secondly
, the
internet
 has made it possible to make friends effortlessly online; through the various social media platforms. Now, making friends who you may like, does not have to be physical anymore.
For instance
, applications like Twitter, Facebook, Instagram and a few other sites; have proven beyond reasonable doubts that, a person can make friends online and in some cases, eventually get married after they meet on the
internet
.
However
, the
internet
 has made people socialize more without barriers like;
location
, race and transportation costs. In conclusion, the
internet
 has made it possible for man to rather socialize more. As it makes communication easier from any
location
, which in turn, aids foreign education and some other advantages. It
also
 helps connect with friends wherever they might be and in some cases, it leads to marriages in the long run.
This
 essay discussed the reasons why the
internet
 does not encourage people not to socialize, but rather it encourages unity around the world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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