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Many think that large international sporting events are not worth the cost for the host country. Do you agree or disagree?

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It
is argues
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argues
is argued
 that large international sports tournaments
donot
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do not
 provide as much return to the host
country
 as they spend to organise them.
This
 essay disagrees with
this
 premise because
such
 events tend to provide a
country
 an unprecedented publicity and economic growth than any other event can.
This
 essay shall outline how these sport events put a
country
 on the map which
otherwise
 may not be as well known followed by the business and economic growth that these events bring. Because of an over-abundance of public interest in tournaments all around the world, a
country
 hosting them becomes a
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 of every discussion, every new
clips
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clip
 and even advertisement during the time of
events
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the events
.
This
 makes an
otherwise
 small and not well known nation famous. With the beautiful shots and
secenary
the painted structures of a stage set that are intended to suggest a particular locale
scenery
 of the
country
 played on television, tourism is an area which definitely receives an overwhelming boost. For
exampl
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
examples
, research shows that foreign tourist visiting India after India hosted commonwealth games is far more than the decade before that. The sport events of
such
 magnitude
brings
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bring
 tremendous growth to the economy and creates
vast number
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a vast number
 of jobs for the citizens of the host
country
. To organise these events a lot of infrastructure is needed. With audience
comingn
of the relatively near future
coming
coming n
 from all over the world, there will be increasing need for accomodation options, food options.
This
 gives a giant increase in number of hotels,
resturants
a building where people go to eat
restaurants
 and sport shops that can be built which in turn provides many locals with jobs.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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