The purpose of businesses is to make money and they should concentrate only on this. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, there are some people believe that the main target of commerce is to earn one's living and they ought to focus on it.

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, in my opinion, I totally disagree with

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point of view and I will explain why in my essay. It is true that earning money is very significant in peoples' lives, but innovation is more important. In modern life, businesses are driven by the ability to solve a new problem. Google,

for example

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, has a large capital, which successfully hires the best engineers and builds the modern infrastructures, but its social networking product, Google+, was

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to attract general customers.

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is probably because Google lacks of attention on the innovation side of its social media; it tends to imitate what already existed out there.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

130 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Financial sustainability
Profit margin
Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
Stakeholder
Socio-economic impact
Ethical business practices
Customer retention
Brand loyalty
Workforce morale
Innovation
Sustainable growth
Competitive edge

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The purpose of businesses is to make money and they should concentrate only on this. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Governments give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What problems does this cause? How can this problem be overcome?

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reason why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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