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The graph shows Underground Station Passenger Numbers in London. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows Underground Station Passenger Numbers in London. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the
amout
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amount
 of Underground Station Passengers from 06.00 am to 22.00 pm.
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, it fluctuates and peaks at certain times. The number of passengers
reachest
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reaches
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 the highest point with 400
people
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 at 08.00 o'clock. But
then
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,
the
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 following two hours, it decreases significantly to only 180
people
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. The figure rises again slightly to 300
people
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,
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however
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 after 14.00 o'clock it begins to plummet down to only 80
people
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.
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, there is
significant
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a significant
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 increase
of
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 passengers after, which peaks at 18.00 pm. The amount
then
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drop
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 down
seamelessly
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seamlessly
shamelessly
 to 110
people
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, with no significant increase in the 3 hours following.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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