Write about the following topic: In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In some nations

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after getting old, individuals choose

old age home

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an old age home

the old age home

old age homes

with others to live and taken care by nurses.I believe that only

government

have

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has

to pay for their expenses because of

high amount

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the high amount

of expenditure and to provide opportunities to use their valuable skills. One of the strongest

reason

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reasons

is that big amount of expenses could be covered only by public funds

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There

are

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a lot of

expenditures including

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expenditures, including

renovation of building

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infrastructure

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salary of staff

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medication which cannot be afforded by society as a whole due to

difference

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differences

in the financial status.

However

government

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the government

has

funds

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funded

and can provide essentials to them by spending money on different things to make their life easy and comfortable.

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government

can spend money on hiring

variety

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a variety

of nurses and doctors who can medicate old ones according to the diseases.

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authority can give birth to different opportunities to use their skills and lifetime experience.It is possible to have different skills in different people, who have spent many years of their age in doing some job or business.So

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government

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the government

can provide basic machinery to open

small scale business

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a small scale business

small scale businesses

that can serve the purpose of earning and quality time according to their skill.

For example

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if someone is

excel

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excelling

in knitting and can make beautiful sweaters or small beautiful dresses that can bring good money or one can be consulted to solve different problems in life with the exchange of good amount. In conclusion,it is regime who only can pay for their expenses and can use their lifetime experience and skills for more

further

earnings for the betterment of life

Mon Feb 24 2020

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Since the 18th century technological advances have replaced people in the workplace. With today’s technology this process is happening at a greater rate. Technology is increasingly responsible for unemployment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Children over 15 years should be allowed to take their own decision without any interference from their parents? Do you agree or disagree.

Art and music classes should not be mandatory at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Write a letter to your neighbor (who is also your friend) about the damage that occurs to your car while he parks his car in the space allotted to you. In the letter, you should: Describe the damage Say how you feel about this problem. Suggest on actions he should take.