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Write about the following topic: In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In some nations
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,
after getting old, individuals choose
old age home
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an old age home
the old age home
old age homes
 with others to live and taken care by nurses.I believe that only
government
have
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has
 to pay for their expenses because of
high amount
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the high amount
 of expenditure and to provide opportunities to use their valuable skills. One of the strongest
reason
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reasons
 is that big amount of expenses could be covered only by public funds
.
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.
There
are
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is
 a lot of
expenditures including
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expenditures, including
 renovation of building
,
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,
infrastructure
,
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,
salary of staff
,
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,
medication which cannot be afforded by society as a whole due to
difference
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differences
 in the financial status.
However
,
government
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the government
 has
funds
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funded
 and can provide essentials to them by spending money on different things to make their life easy and comfortable.
For example
,
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,
government
 can spend money on hiring
variety
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a variety
 of nurses and doctors who can medicate old ones according to the diseases.
In addition
,
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,
authority can give birth to different opportunities to use their skills and lifetime experience.It is possible to have different skills in different people, who have spent many years of their age in doing some job or business.So
,
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,
government
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the government
 can provide basic machinery to open
small scale business
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a small scale business
small scale businesses
 that can serve the purpose of earning and quality time according to their skill.
For example
,
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,
if someone is
excel
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excelling
 in knitting and can make beautiful sweaters or small beautiful dresses that can bring good money or one can be consulted to solve different problems in life with the exchange of good amount. In conclusion,it is regime who only can pay for their expenses and can use their lifetime experience and skills for more
further
 earnings for the betterment of life

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