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some people think that computer skills should be added to primary subjects in elementary school such as reading,writing and math. how far do you agree or disagree ?

#people #computer #skills #subjects #school #math
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Nowadays, computers and related technologies take a crucial role in the community’s advancement and using them will progress significantly. While it’s believed that
computer
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skill just
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skill, just
 like any other subjects should be studied by students during their elementary
school
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. I agree with the idea and I think adolescents should start learning
computer
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 skills enthusiastically.
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However it’s
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However, it’s
 the duty of the teachers and parents as well to make sure that the growing teenagers do not
use
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 them improperly. On the one hand, using computers
have became
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has become
 much common that
almost we
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we use it almost
use
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 it everyday and it took much time until we were able to learn important skills in using it. If children could start to study them earlier in
school
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, they will probably be more professional in it when they reach twentieth
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.
 So using it will be much easier for them
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For example
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, when they learn how to
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 C++
,
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,
 they might be able to make their own program in the future
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.
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, a lot of teenagers
use
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 computers for playing games and watching those videos that are not suitable for their growing
ages
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age
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Thus certain
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Thus, certain
 programs and online websites should be blocked by their parents or
school
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 authorities before letting the teenager
use
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 the
computer
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.
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, many games
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are
 addictive and time consuming that
keep
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keeps
adolescents
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adolescent
 attention away from studying.
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, elementary
school
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 students should be advised to know for which purpose they ought to
use
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 computers and any other smart technologies. In conclusion,
although
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 many people
believes
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believe
 that
computer
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 skills shall be studied like any other elementary
school
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 subjects
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 I agree with the idea because
necessity
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the necessity
 of acquiring
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 skills
tend
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tends
 to
increase so
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increase, so
 teenagers should start studying them in an earlier
ages
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age
.
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, it’s their
families
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family
family's
families'
 responsibilities to make sure that their child
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use
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uses
 computers in a proper way.
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