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Task 1: Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the mortality and
natality
the quality or state of being mortal
mortality
 rates in New Zealand for the period of 200 years. Overall, while there has been an increase in the death
rate
 by the years, the
birth
rate
 has fluctuated over the time. Starting from 1901, the
rate
 of giving
birth
 to a baby stood at about 20000s, which was approximately two times compared with the death
rate
. The
natality
the quality or state of being mortal
mortality
rate
 continued to go up until it reached its peak about 65
thousands
Suggestion
thousand
. After
this
 point, the
birth
rate
 experienced a fluctuation.
However
, it is foretold that between 2021 and 2101,
this
rate
 would reach a plateau at 50000s, approximately. The fatality
rate
 sees a steady rise throughout the period of the
first
 120 years, following by an upward trend for the
next
 of 20 years. For the rest of the time,
this
rate
 is projected to level off, raking more or less at 60
thousands
Suggestion
thousand
. To sum up, both rates experienced a variation in
this
 projected period. After 200 years, the death
rate
 will end up higher than the
birth
rate
.

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