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Some say that you should always marry for love, others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money

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Marrying someone considered to be a sacred vow between two humans from ancient time. In today's world with increasing competition to get a stable and respected social
life
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 and
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 with
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 increasing the complexity between people arises the unavoidable question that, shall we make a lifetime commitment with another
person
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 on the basis of
wealth
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 or on true
love
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 and affection. The below passages will illustrate that if one
person
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 truly
love
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 and understands other
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 only he or she should make the engagement as it will be a long term
relationship
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 and
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 help to remove the upcoming obstacles on the social way of
life
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. When a
person
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 does
love
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marriage
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 that will result in a stable and healthy
relationship
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. For an example, one of my cousins has completed
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 kind of
marriage
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 and it has been fifteen long years and still their
relationship
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 is stable and solid as rock as they understand each other completely and no other outside factors able to create any nuisance among them.
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,
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 leads to a healthy
relationship
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 because if some
person
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 marries on the basis of
wealth
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,
then
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 their
relationship
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 will
last
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 till the bank balance is there and both of them have to worry about getting enough coins all the time to keep alive their bond and make sense of their
marriage
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.
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, none of
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 will matter in
love
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marriage
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 as
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 based on understanding and affection, not on some competition.
Love
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marriage
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 can
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 teach someone, to never give up in adverse situations and
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 help in controlling
wealth
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 lust. If someone marries on the basis upon silvers or golds,
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 they can give up easily in front of any challenges as their togetherness is based upon some kind of contract.
Life
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 is not a path with plates of roses only, there will be thrones and even the smallest of it can create a disaster between them.
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 will not be true for the couple who made their sacred
marriage
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 vows of
love
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 as it makes their bonding not to give up in any situations
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Accept space
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 On the other side of the picture, today's world is filled with competition and lust for
wealth
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 and that's not helping in making any stable social environment
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Marriage
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A marriage
 based on
love
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 can help to eradicate that and
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 helps to build a stable social way of
life
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. Based on the above, it can be concluded that the logic of persons who support "Money"
marriage
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 is futile and can be ignored in front of
marriage
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 based on
love
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 as it helps not only in creating stable personal
life
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 but
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 in creating stable society for present and future generations what we need greatly in these days.

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