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As people live longer and longer, the idea of cloning human being in order to provide spare parts is becoming a reality. The idead horrifies most people, yet is is no longer mere science fiction. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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At the beginning of time when people were new to
this
 world, always feared nature, but always tried to overcome it. But gradually with the help of a tool, called "
Science
", we begin to conquer the world. With the help of
science
, a man's average
life
 span now increased from twenty years to ninety years and that's why now-a-days, the human clone concept becomes a well discussed topic. But according to my view, increasing a person's
life
 in an artificial way disrupts the
life
 stability and
also
 it gives more power to
rich
reach a destination, either real or abstract
reach
 people and creates imbalance. We all know that everything has a bane and boon and
science
 is
also
 not different.
Science
 helps us to give a certain amount of lifetime, which was merely a dream like hundred years ago. But if we stretch that span,
then
 it will disrupt the natural
life
 cycle and destroy the ecology. For an example, we can say that a living person nearly emits 343 kg of carbon dioxide directly or indirectly into the environment and expanding the living time will harm more.
This
 can become a main ingredient for the cause of Global warming. Apart from those, our
society
 is not perfect and there was always divided according to wealth and that will be same in future
also
. Human cloning is not cheap, so it is not like everyone can afford it. That's why the top layer of the
society
 will be mainly beneficial with
this
 latest invention of
science
. Not only
this
, but
also
 it will be applicable for the persons whose intention is evil in the
society
 as if they can accumulate enough money, they can
also
 take benefit from cloning and can create huge social problems. To sum it up, intention of
science
 has been always good, but not the implementer's. As history has many examples of human behaviour controlled by greed and lust and that can repeat again in the case of cloning as
this
 will not be available for everyone in the
society
 and will
also
 create a deep and harmful impact in the environment.

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